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~JenGarza Oct 14, 2012  Professional Filmographer
@04:03You're nailing it, Miriam. You're right - the only way to make it work is if my posing and animation is strong.

Funnily enough, I'm actually strongly revising this animatic into something more plausible. I did start animation, which is a shame, and I'll probably post a little clip of it on youtube and devianart within the next week or so. The new animation is much more.... well, to the point. After getting down to the basics, I realized that I really don't need a narrative for this animation - I need to address bullying directly without any fluff around it. I hope to get some more advice from you on the next one I post. I highly regard your opinions and input. Without being in school, it's harder to find people to just tell you in a straight forward, yet motivating matter what they think could be edited and improved. I guess what I'm saying is: よろしくおねがいします！
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Working Title- an American Sign Language animation funded by the MN State Arts Board. This animation will be entirely silent, no sound whatsoever. There will be no subtitles. Only through these animatics do you get an exclusive sneak peak at what Beaks is signing.

Many of the notes in this animatic are simply a process thing. Even in my illustrations I make notes as I draw- it's a bit of a habit even if the notes are not needed. It is my belief that storyboards and the initial animatics be messy and quick in addition to clearly illustrating what is happening. That way one can make changes in the middle of the process without hesitation. Already this animatic has gone through at least a dozen revisions. Please do not hesitate to add your input! All opinions will be welcome and respected here.

Please note: the character design process is still under way. Many of the character designs may change later in the process.
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=GenkiGoth Jul 14, 2012  Professional Filmographer
@04:03I'm loving the premise of the story and its approach. Since I don't know sign language, the fact that i can read some of the notes now before the final product is up is a bit of a relief, so I'll know what's going on, lol!

I think the only thing I'd be careful of is the timing. There's a bit of a tension in its pacing, and I'm wondering if it's because of the fact that there's nothing to guide it through. Of course, I'm probably thinking waaaayy too much into this considering it's an animatic, LOL!

Maybe you can treat a simple melody as a written note as well? Nothing that will be heard of course when the animation is finished, just as a starting point for the narrative flow.

Forgive my nosiness and sticking my 2 cents where it doesn't belong. I cannot wait to see how this is going to look finished!!

Genki
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~JenGarza Aug 28, 2012  Professional Filmographer
@04:03I thought I responded to this- I'm sorry! Thanks for the critique! <3 I always love your input- it makes me think in an entirely different way! : ) The pacing is tense, you're right. I'm actually glad you got that sort of feeling from it! Since the animation is entirely silent- no music, sound of any kind, the slower pacing seems to work better than a faster one for both atmospheric effect and clarity. I'm thinking something like The Illusionist, Samurai Jack, and Mushishi are the sort of pacing styles that I'm trying to mimic.

What I'm most concern with is the narrative. Is it interesting at all or does it seem lack luster to you? I'm trying to get different sets of very honest opinions on it. Most seem to like it, but I don't know if I'm okay with just "liking" it, you know?
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=GenkiGoth Oct 11, 2012  Professional Filmographer
@04:03I love how wonderful we are at getting back to one another, LMAO! I'm so sorry for taking this long to respond!

Hmmmm....I get what you're saying in that you don't wanna just like it. I'm feeling the same way, I like it but I'm not sure what can be done to improve it any without altering what you've already got in terms of pacing.

Maybe the feeling of unease is there because of how early it is in the creative process? Like, for me, since there's no sound to accompany this, I can totally see this being captivating visually. Really expressive body language to make it evident when the kids are mocking her or hypnotized (I didn't mention the main character because I already like what you've got going on with her!) a real nice color palette and textures on the background, maybe some small bits of secondary animation here and there (like leaves flitting in the wind when she's in that open air area and meets the monster. Nothing too big, just enough to create more life in those impasses)

I think you'll be much more satisfied with the narrative once you start seeing some structure visual cues as the animation progresses. Not to say it's bad at this point, I enjoy it so far. I just think that you'll be much happier with the flow of the narrative once the animation progresses a bit. I think by your second animatic you'll be sold, lol!

Genki
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~JenGarza Oct 14, 2012  Professional Filmographer
@04:03You're nailing it, Miriam. You're right - the only way to make it work is if my posing and animation is strong.

Funnily enough, I'm actually strongly revising this animatic into something more plausible. I did start animation, which is a shame, and I'll probably post a little clip of it on youtube and devianart within the next week or so. The new animation is much more.... well, to the point. After getting down to the basics, I realized that I really don't need a narrative for this animation - I need to address bullying directly without any fluff around it. I hope to get some more advice from you on the next one I post. I highly regard your opinions and input. Without being in school, it's harder to find people to just tell you in a straight forward, yet motivating matter what they think could be edited and improved. I guess what I'm saying is: よろしくおねがいします！
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